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Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity?

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Bicycle
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The bicycle
 is one of the most eco-friendly transport in the world.
However
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, cycling is uncommon in many
nationsm
a politically organized body of people under a single government
nations
.
This
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 essay will discuss the problems and
then
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 propose some solutions
Firstly
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, in some regions, there are so many highways and overpasses which are for private cars or motorbikes.
Moreover
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, in the rush hour in many cities,
streets
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the streets
 are always crowded and traffic congestion happens all the time that unsuitable for bicycle.
In addition
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, cycling is inconvenient for a group or a family wants to move together because
it
it is
it's
 so independent. To tackle
this
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 problem and increase its popularity, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should convey to everyone about
benefits
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the benefits
 of cycling.
Such
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 as go to work or study by bicycle will be more environmentally friendly than other types of transport and
also
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 save the energy
speacially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
specially
 petroleum.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, cycling
everyday
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every day
 will be good for health and longevity. According to Otago University,
premature mortality rate
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the premature mortality rate
 of people who usually ride a bike decrease thirteen percent than others.
Additionlly
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Additionally
, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 can open car-free day like
Paris which
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Paris, which
 is supported by French. Another way is the administration should consider opening up
public bicycle system
Suggestion
the public bicycle system
. To sum up, cycling has many pros so people should ride a bike more often for individuals and
environment
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the environment
.
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