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Some believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss

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Some people say that it is our duty to take care of the
environment
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. Others think that it is the responsibility of the government to do so. In
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 essay I will write about both points of view. In the
first
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 place, we the people are responsible for our
planet
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. We are the ones who should clamp down on taking care of
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environment
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the environment
. When walking on the streets, we can see a lot of trash lying on pavements or grass even if there is a trash can near by.
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, people are still buying cars with engines driven by oil because they are cheaper in maintenance
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 of hybrids or even ordinary gas. We should start thinking about our and our children's future
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 of what is cheaper. If everybody stars buying products which are not in plastic boxes it would have a great impact on
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environment
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the environment
. What I mean is, with or without government help we should think about
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planet
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the planet
 and our lives.
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, authority should
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 help their people to be more ecologically. They should give greater punishments for littering. They should ban vehicles with diesel engines in every country. They have greater power than we have so they
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 should do something with huge companies which are polluting our
planet
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, our home.
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, set some scale of pollution for them and when they cross the line close it. Trying to save earth is not an easy task, it is impossible to completely erase pollution, but government can try to minimize it somehow. In conclusion, it is extremely important for both sites to take care of the
environment
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. We cannot wait for others to do if for us. We need to start acting now and save our
planet
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.
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