In many places, people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?
Changes in society in economy, culture, entertainment
an other
fields have known as the result of the emergence of new features in human lifestyle which influence family relationship. I believe that the negative and positive effects any of various alternatives; some other
another
from
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of
this
development are equal
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which lead to slice
off time to interact with family members. Suggestion
to slicing
This
affect
directly to the bond Suggestion
affects
among
people. Suggestion
between
For instance
, a lot of people spend their whole day to suft
move as if through a sieve
sift
shift
on
the internet to update news and interact with friends. As the results, less time to talk to family members exacerbate relationships. Suggestion
to
Moreover
, these days, people are becoming more and more carreer
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clearer
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life
. To illustrate, some parents too
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in
to
generation gap
with their children
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the generation gap
However
, The developmet
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
also
brings positive effects to families. People interact with each other in social network more espeacially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
young generation
. Grasping Suggestion
the young generation
this
mentality, some parents take advangatge
of social the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
network
as a tool to approach and talk to their kids as a friend which they never done in real Suggestion
networking
life
. This
mounts
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effection
and a positive feeling of liking
affection
affections
a
opportunity for parents can understand their children more. Suggestion
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Other
typical Suggestion
Another
expample
is that the habit of communication via social networks rather than to face to face meeting helps family members who lives far away an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
form
each other to show love care through the exchanges of messages and emotions or via voice or video calls. a giver or sender
from
This
new way of connection
reduces trip back home of children but still keep strong attachment with their family Suggestion
connecting
menbers
.
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sides
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side
life
styles have caused to connections of family member
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