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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. (Do you agree or disagree?)

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It is generally assumed that participating in parenting course is the optimum way for their children’s development. Despite the fact that these
course
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courses
 can bring some advantages, I completely disagree with
this
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 notion and there are some different methods for parents. Making
moms
informal term for a mother
mums
 and dads undertake parenting classes is not feasible.
Firstly
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, it is hard for some working parents or single parents to make ends meet, let
alone to spend money
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alone spend money
 on
such
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 courses. Fathers and mothers, who struggle financially, often take more than 9 hours in their companies.
Therefore
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, there is no time left for them to
joining
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join
 classes that many occupy a large fraction in their busy schedule.
Moreover
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, it is ridiculous to force parents taking part in
such
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 courses
instead
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 of
let
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letting
 them
making
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make
 their own decision. No lessons can be efficient if the participants are not willing to acquire it. From my perspective, there are
also
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 some methods for busy parents to improve their childcare. The most popular way is seeking their needed documents online.
WIth
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With
 the assistance of the INternet, parents can easily assimilate not only theoretical
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
 videos and advices from professional as well.
For example
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, there are many groups about
childcare
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child care
 in renowned social networking sites that usually update the news and most effective technique about raising and educating a kid.
Moreover
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, parents can learn from their predecessors who are full of experience. It is advantageous for them to have
be
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been
 able to have a good grasp of practical information which may
be not available online
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not be available online
. In conclusion, despite some benefits that parenting courses provide, my firm belief is that
parent
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parents
a parent
 should have the right to make their own decision whether
thay
people in general
they
that
 underscore these classes.
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