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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Other think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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At present, inventions of applied sciences are hotly debated subject of popular media.It is often argued by some that a huge variety of latest gadgetries are enhancing differences between wealthy and poverty-stricken people over the period of time because of affordability.Meanwhile
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others claim that newest
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the supporters of the idea that
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 is extending gap believe that latest equipments and devices are non-affordable for needy.As these are so expensive that poverty-stricken population are unable to purchase and avail
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 facilities.Take the example of India
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where millions of people are spending their lives below the poverty line, whereas
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in another part of the country
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well off community is enjoying the perks of all latest devices.
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 has increased difference because of costly items. While
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advocates of the view that
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 has reduced the space between the well off and poor claim that all newly invented items are easily accessible to all.As, with the expansion of trade between nations, these all gadgets are easily available at all places.
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during the economic revolution in Japan in the late 1970s
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almost every Japanese was having all latest devices concerning to education which
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 brought about a revolution in the country.
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 has lessened the space between rich and poor due to accessibility. Whereas
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I believe that latest inventions in
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 have influenced the social life of people in both ways.In order to reduce the gap, prices of items should be reduced and made available for all communities. To sum up
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the difference between well off and poor can be decreased by making the items affordable for people as well as providing an ease of access.
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