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Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends. Others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and appreciation. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #show #care #friends #appreciation
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Gifts are the token of
love
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. People
exchange
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 gifts on birthdays, marriage anniversaries and on other occasions. It is said by some individuals that in order to show
love
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 and affection to others people should
exchange
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 presents while others think that there are some different ways of expressing
love
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 and care for others and my viewpoints will be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, people think that they can express in
better way
Suggestion
a better way
 when they
exchange
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 gifts
on
Suggestion
for
 birthday parties and marriage anniversaries and their loved ones feel special
.
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.
For instance
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, if parents want to show
love
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 to their
children
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children, then
then
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 they should give them gifts because when children receive gifts on their birthdays
then
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 they feel happiness and enjoyment and
this
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 the reason that these days birthdays are celebrated in schools.
On the other hand
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,
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,
many people have contradictory viewpoints. They think that there are some others ways to appreciate family members and others
.
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.
People can help them in their difficult time and they can financially support them
.
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They can
also
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 encourage them in every walk of life. They can
also
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 guide and mentally support them
.
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They can
also
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 help them whenever they need assistance. To recapitulate, I would like to write that everyone has its own way to express
love
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,
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,
 care and affection.Some people prefer to
exchange
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 gifts while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 have their own ways and methods.
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