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Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How can parents provide solutions

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When children become teenagers than they face lot of problems at schools and colleges which put bad impact on their emotional well -being and stability. There are numerous causes for it and solutions will be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, one cause of their
problem
 is that these days parents are working and they have limited time and they are not aware about the problems of their children. So, teenagers find themselves lonely and sad which is bad for their emotional and mental health. Another
problem
 is that teenagers
also
 face
problem
Suggestion
the problem
 of bullying at schools which
also
 affect their mind negatively and
some time
at some indefinite or unstated time
sometime
 they
also
 face the
problem
 of grasping some subjects which is the biggest issue for them and they have study pressure to get good scores. On the other hand, there are some solutions to eradicate
these
Suggestion
this problem
these problems
problem
.
Firstly
, schools should appoint
psychologist
Suggestion
a psychologist
 who can guide students about their petty issues which can give them relief from their problems.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
 Parents should spend some free time for their children and they should talk openly with their children about every matter
.
Accept space
.
They should treat their children with love and affection
.
Accept space
.
Another solution is that parents should make efforts to keep their children busy by involving them in different sports activities. To recapitulate
,
Accept space
,
 I would like to write that teenagers need lot of attention and care and they should not be ignored by their parents. Teachers must opt different ways and techniques to handle teenagers
instead
 of giving them punishment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • overwhelmed
  • challenging
  • cope
  • pressure
  • intimidation
  • supportive
  • effective communication
  • expectations
  • tension
  • compromise
  • negotiation
  • confrontation
  • addiction
  • screen time
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