1. Briefly describe the Program or Project including:

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Currently, a hospital located in Melbourne is coping with high number of
pacients
a person who requires medical care
patients
, the executive manager and the stakeholders came up with the idea to expand the number of intensive unit care units. To do so, they seek for a biomedical engineer who will be in charge of running the whole
project
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.  The
objetive
the goal intended to be attained (and which is believed to be attainable)
objective
of the
project
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is to implement
wider range
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a wider range
of new technologies and a higher number of units within a year period for its
completition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
completion
, taking into account all the actual regulation in term of health system approaches and following the victoria health standards.
They
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Their
project
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also
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aims to be undertaken while still providing services to the
community
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. The scope of
this
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project
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is to achieve quality standards in order to provide
a
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an
outstanding service for the
community
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. Most of the hospitals in Melbourne provide
a
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an
excellent
services
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service
,
therefore
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, the
project
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aims to go beyond the current hospital performance.
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,
this
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project
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is mean to be accessible for the whole
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community regardless
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community, regardless
social or
econimic
of or relating to an economy, the system of production and management of material wealth
economic
status. After assessing the required budget, the biomedical engineer and the
project
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executive
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execution
team determined $2 million for the
project
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completition
a concluding action
completion
.
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prices
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price
include
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includes
all
kind
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kinds
of
expenses including
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expenses, including
payslips and
project
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management plan. The resources involved include: a
socioeconomical
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
study in order to determine the
community
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background where the hospital will develop. In
term
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terms
of human resource, a biomedical engineer with experience in unit care systems is required to design and
stablish
set up or found
establish
what equipment,
techonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
,
biosecurity
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Biosecurity
procedures need to be bought.
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, some specialists will work in
conjuction
the temporal property of two things happening at the same time
conjunction
with the engineers to provide a better approach for the
project
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. In
term
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terms
of the new structure of the hospital, as more intensive cares will be built, the hospital will need extra space (land).
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