In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

unemployment
Suggestion
Unemployment
is
serious issue
Suggestion
a serious issue
the serious issue
of concern in the developed and developing countries. It is said by some individuals that these days people are educated but they do not have any job.There are numerous reasons behind
this
and solutions will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
with, the
first
reason behind
this
situation is
that is
some countries
education
system
is not based on practical knowledge and only theoretical knowledge is imparted in the colleges
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, a survey was conducted in India in 2018 and its result was that fifty percent graduate of India
are
Suggestion
is
unemployed because in India some of the colleges are less equipped with technology based
education
and the pupils acquire only theoretical knowledge
On the other hand
, in order to tackle
this
situation countries should make efforts for the betterment of
education
Suggestion
the education system
system
.
Accept space
.
For example
,
government
Suggestion
the government
of India should give funds to colleges so that they can spend money to buy technology based equipments which are really essential for the overall growth of
education
Suggestion
the education system
education systems
system
and if the
education
system
will be updated
then
it will bring more job opportunities for the youngsters in
future
Suggestion
the future
. To recapitulate,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would like to write that job
oppotunites
Suggestion
opportunity
opportunities
of any country depends upon
education
system
and if
education
system
practical and
efficent
being effective without wasting time or effort or expense
efficient
then
it will provide
the better
Suggestion
the best
employent
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
prospects for the
younsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
.
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