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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Reading
newspaper
Suggestion
the newspaper
 or watching different news channels to gain
information
 about what's happening was a trend's, but nowadays according to different survey report we get to know that very few young people read the news or watch various
information
 channels on tv and
this
 has badly effect to young ones and
this
 situation has many causes. Let's overview
this
 statement and suggest some solutions.
Firstly
, to gain some
information
 about what's happening in the world, one should must read
newspaper
Suggestion
the newspaper
newspapers
, watch the different news on television or get
information
 from the various applications which provide source related to news. In the 21st century in different various countries very less young people read
newspaper
 or watch the news,
this
 could be the reason because of their lifestyle in which they are living or it could be due to the community or group of people in which they are mostly interacting. Thesedays young children don't even have time to watch even cartoon or spend some time for themselves because of their studies and their routing life has
also
 become hectic due to they have to go to different classes for their extra cirruculum activities and other thing is that children gets update from their smartphone so they don't need the help of other source.
Secondly
,
this
 type of situation can be can be deal in many ways and there are many solutions to solve
this
 kind of problem
for example
: - Government can take the initiative by taking certain steps like in school teacher should spend at least 15 minutes in sharing different news,
secondly
 in schools or different institution a teacher should give a task to children about that they have to speak 5-10 news in
next session
Suggestion
the next session
 so that children start watching the news.
Lastly
, to conclude watching the news or
newspaper
 reading is very important for every child because one should know what's happening in their country and it is as important as their studies.
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