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Governments should spend money on education than that of sports and recreation. Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #education #sports #recreation
There is always debate about money allocated between
education
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the education
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 and recreational sectors.
However
, some people believe that
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 national bodies should give more emphasis on schooling.
Although
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, I do not fully agree with the above statement and will elaborate
my
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 view in the essay.
To begin
 with, education plays an essential role in the development of the nation
as well as
 the children and it should not be given secondary importance. The reason is,
education
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that education
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 is the backbone of any country's progress, if the literacy rate is higher,
then
 the country will produce
best
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 scientists, engineers,
businessmen
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and businessmen
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, which will lead the nation towards a positive direction.
For example
, learning will help to eradicate poverty from
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society
as well as
 old thinking.
Thus
, schooling should be given greater importance.
On the other hand
, sport should not be left behind, as it
also
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 its own importance and many people
wants
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 to make a career in it and want to change their life. Not
ever
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every
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 students want to become a scientist or doctor some are interested in becoming
sportsman
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sportsmen
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. If the government builds proper infrastructure facilities it will encourage students to take part in it and as the
country
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country,
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 we can make a good name on the world level.
For instance
, China and
USA
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the USA
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 are always in
top
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the top
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 three countries in the
Olympic
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Olympics
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,
whereas
 India does not stand a chance
due to
 poor facilities and many more reasons.
Therefore
, to shine at
international
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the international
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 level, government bodies should invest in it.
To conclude
,
the
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learning will always have an upper hand compared to a sport, but
this
 should change as many people are made for sports
as well as
 other recreational activities by which they can make their nation proud.
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task response
Provide a clear position on the topic and develop it throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical structure with proper introduction and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • crucial aspect
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • social inequalities
  • socioeconomic backgrounds
  • educational infrastructure
  • long-term investment
  • public health
  • community engagement
  • increased tourism
  • sporting events
  • employment rates
  • skilled workforce
  • innovation
  • research
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • health pandemics
  • technological advancement
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