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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that individuals can tackle these problems individuals can tackle these problems.

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The industrial revolution
has created
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created
 waves of migration, partly contributing to the overpopulation of urban areas.
This
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 problem affects directly on
quality
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the quality
 of living of
residents
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the residents
,
therefore
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 the
government
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 and individuals should take action together to solve
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 social problem.
First
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 of all, overpopulation led to a low standard of living. The low-income class can not have enough money to pay for social services
such
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 as health services and education services. They may live in slums where social vices and diseases are not solved thoroughly. Take India as an example, millions of people will have been affected by famine and COVID 19. Medical service and food supplies during quarantine are overloaded.
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, thousands of dwellers may face death.
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, pollution is one of the results of overpopulation. A vast number of private
vehicle
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vehicles
has circulated
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have circulated
 due to traffic congestion. During rush hour in Hanoi, a large amount of CO2 emission is discharged, air pollution in Hanoi is increasingly serious.
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, both
government
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 and individuals are believed to tackle
this
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 situation day by day. The
government
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 should promulgate an evacuation policy and increase the number of employment offers in the suburb.
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, the number of inhabitants
migrate
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migrates
 to cities for doing
for
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in
 the living will decrease. Each family should reduce fertility rates to slow down population growth. In conclusion, a
low
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lower
 standard of living and pollution are
unexpected consequences
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the unexpected consequences
 of a rise in residents in the city.
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,
this
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 social issue can be curtailed if the
government
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 has reasonable residential projects. Every individual performs strictly evacuation policies to contribute to reducing population growth.
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