Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is said that high
school
students should be required to participate in unpaid community activities as an
indepensable
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
part of their studying programmes.
while
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While
I accept that it is beneficial for students, I
also
believe that we should not constrain them to do
voluntary
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volunteer
activities at
school
. On the one hand, I would agree that
in addition
to the main subjects in
classroom
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the classroom
,
participanting
taking part in an activity
participating
in volunteering brings a lot of benefits.
First
, community service as a way to
helps
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help
children reduce stress after
strssful
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
lessons Community service is a way to help children reduce stress after stressful lessons.
In other words
, children who take part in organised volunteer work will meet different people to catch up with each other,
therefore
they can make new friends and generally feel better.
Secondly
, helping
thoes
plural of that
those
who from a poor background or disabled. It is important for children to learn how to love and share. Helping
thoses
plural of that
those
who are from a poor background or disabled is important for children to learn how to love and share.
For example
, experiencing voluntary work for
teachiing
the profession of a teacher
teaching
poor students
is
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will be
very likely to help students develop career in the future
On the other hand
, I
also thinks
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also think
am also thinking
that high
school
should do
mandatory voluteer work
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the mandatory volunteer work
mandatory volunteer work
when they like and we should not force them.
First
, learning at
school
accounts for the majority time of
pupils
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the pupils
.
In addition
, they
also
do homework
everyday
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every day
.
Hence
, children need more leisure time to relax
instead
of organising volunteer service that may lead to students have to under greater
pressur
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
pressures
lead to greater pressure when they do not have enough time to complete their studies.
Besides
, students play sports
such
as
tenis
a game played with rackets by two or four players who hit a ball back and forth over a net that divides the court
tennis
, swimming, soccer and so on. It is necessary for them to gain energy back to study more effectively after a hard
studying day
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day studying
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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