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Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connection between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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To begin
 with,
technology
 nowadays has changed a lot. These days in the 21st century
communication
 have improved so much that it has become easy to connect to various people, with the
help
 of various
communication
 applications it has improved our connection between people. Let's discuss
this
.
Firstly
,
technology
 has helped us in terms of everything. Previously, there was no perfect mode of
communication
 between people, but people used to communicate with the
help
 of different animals like they used birds in terms of
communication
for example
: - They use birds like eagle in which they string the letter on the leg of bird and tell them to fly to their destination,
secondly they
Accept comma addition
secondly, they
 communicate with the
help
 of horse to send their message to different people but these types of network takes lots of time.
Secondly
, due to advanced in
communication
technology
 and with the
help
 of various modes of transmission like email, messaging and various social media chatting platforms like Facebook, what apps has helped people a lot and it has
also
 improved the connection between the people too. The speed, efficiency due to digital transmission has
also
 speeded up, previously it takes 1 month to receive a message, but due to advances in routes it takes only a couple of few seconds. With the
help
 of internet one person can easy can talk to different person in any part of the world.
Lastly
, to conclude in my opinion, I agree with the statement that digital connection has improved a lot in terms of communicating with the
help
 of various applications to connect with different people and with the advanced in
technology
 it has
also
 helped us.
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