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In the last 20 years, there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example, the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future.

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Nowadays, the advancement of Information Technology, specifically the
internet
 has transformed the face of our civilization. Albeit, the
internet
 has several drawbacks, I disagree that it outweighs the advantages. It is true that the
internet
 can bring some negative influences toward human behaviour,
such
 as consumerism and autistic manner, to name a few. Consumerism,
for example
, is caused by the rapid growth of e-commerce, online advertising, and
internet
 accessibility. Because of
this
, people found it easy to do transactions. They prefer to buy things online other than making an effort to go to their nearest local retail shop.
On the other hand
,
such
 conditions, especially
internet
 access, which compounded by the widespread use of mobile gadgets, had induced autistic manner among
internet
 user. Autistic here, means, that people tend to be less active and isolated at the same time because they can easily do things with the
internet
 by only having gadgets in their hand or sitting in front of the computer.
However
, information technology has
also
 done justice to mankind.
Firstly
, it helped bring people together despite country boundary and remoteness.
Secondly
, due to the
internet
, people can bridge the gap of communication's distance easily and rapidly. Some examples
for
Suggestion
of
 these are the usage of instant messenger, email, and online meeting application.
Finally
, since
internet
 helped eliminate territorial's gap, any world citizen can now easily spread their movement to the global citizen. In conclusion,
although
 Information Technology, particularly
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, has several negative impacts, in my opinion, it has more advantages to offer to our future generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological dependency
  • data breaches
  • identity theft
  • digital divide
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • e-waste
  • social inequalities
  • mental health issues
  • environmental consequences
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