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In the last 20 years, there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example, the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future.

Nowadays, the advancement of Information Technology, specifically the
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 has transformed the face of our civilization. Albeit, the
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 has several drawbacks, I disagree that it outweighs the advantages. It is true that the
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 can bring some negative influences toward human behaviour,
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 as consumerism and autistic manner, to name a few. Consumerism,
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, is caused by the rapid growth of e-commerce, online advertising, and
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 accessibility. Because of
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, people found it easy to do transactions. They prefer to buy things online other than making an effort to go to their nearest local retail shop.
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,
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 conditions, especially
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 access, which compounded by the widespread use of mobile gadgets, had induced autistic manner among
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 user. Autistic here, means, that people tend to be less active and isolated at the same time because they can easily do things with the
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 by only having gadgets in their hand or sitting in front of the computer.
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 done justice to mankind.
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, it helped bring people together despite country boundary and remoteness.
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, due to the
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, people can bridge the gap of communication's distance easily and rapidly. Some examples
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 these are the usage of instant messenger, email, and online meeting application.
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, since
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 helped eliminate territorial's gap, any world citizen can now easily spread their movement to the global citizen. In conclusion,
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the internet
, has several negative impacts, in my opinion, it has more advantages to offer to our future generations.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological dependency
  • data breaches
  • identity theft
  • digital divide
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • e-waste
  • social inequalities
  • mental health issues
  • environmental consequences
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