Children over 15 years should be allowed to make decisions about their lives Without the interference of their parents or teachers. Society should accept That children mature at a younger age these days and should adjust the law Accordingly.

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Easy access to information, better education system today, allow
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children above the
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of 15 more confident and greater knowledge. But,
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has not provide
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has not provided
them emotional maturity and experience to take important decisions without the active participation of their parents
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do able not differentiate
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outcomes of their decisions, in which form is
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right or wrong.
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, the important decisions that children take, can easily go wrong, because of lack of experience and
temperamental nature
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the temperamental nature
of their decision making process. Since children would be able to make decisions about their personal, professional or education life, like career choices or life partners, wrong decisions can prove to be detrimental to their success in future life.
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of 15 is
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a crucial period
for them to lay a foundation in their educational career, if not properly guided by parents, there could be a danger of school dropouts. The
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step, there is no need to change the present law to accommodate the rights of children of
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group. If the law is amended to protect the rights these children, both parents and teacher would completely lose their control over them both at home and in school.
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, they could be involved in bad habits like drug addiction, alcoholism and uncontrolled sexual relationship. Elders would require a lawful control over them at
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to safeguard them from
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potential dangers. All in all, Parents and teachers who have greater experience and mental sustainability should guide them at
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age
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. They have a great knowledge of verdict making approach rather than teenagers in order to find out
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a proper solution
of their problems, related to career or lifestyle.
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