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Men and women can never share the same responsibilities at home and in everyday life. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Gender discrimination is a social problem. For centuries, it is believed that
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 male and female cannot perform the same duties and responsibilities, whether it is on professional front or daily
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 tasks.
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, I disagree with statement as any task can be done efficiently irrespective of a person's gender. There is no denying of the fact that half a century earlier, women were not allowed to set foot outside their houses. They were assigned to
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 chores only, but in today's world, one cannot follow the same old norms and protocols as women are achieving great successes in every field.
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, a decade earlier, in a typical
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, only men were responsible for providing financial aid, but
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 trend has ultimately changed
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women are working too.
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,
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 men and women have equal rights, and they work together in every field of life, rubbing their shoulders with each other.
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, today's females are working in defence forces while many men have chosen cooking as their profession. The whole scenario ha changed and
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 perform equal responsibilities.
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, various campaigns relating girls' education are run by government and social activists which has helped in spreading awareness among people especially parents. Girls are educated and given the same resources as boys.
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 has definitely helped women to become financially independent and live life without depending on men. In the ultimate analysis,
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 men and women play an equal role and can perform any job proficiently and can even do
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 chores which can help in building a strong relationship.
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