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Some people believe charity organisations should only offer help to people of their own countries. Others against it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many believe that humanitarian organisation should target their local residents in terms of financial assistance,
while
 others think that they should provide aid everywhere in the world. From my point of view, these
organisations
 should not have any boundaries for helping the less fortunate;
otherwise
, it will be challenging to tackle some massive issues for any particular
country
's
charities
. There are many reasons to spend charity
fund
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funds
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 in own
country
.
To begin
 with, some
organisations
 have financial limitations.
For example
,
charities
 operating in poor countries have a shortage of money, so in that case, it will be impossible to help other nations, and if they do so, their citizen will
be suffered
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 unprecedentedly.
Also
, many
charities
 collect their fund from local reach people, and it will be justified if these collections
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 for needy residents of
this
country
 that will motivate affluent people to donate more in the future;
as a result
, a lot of problems will be alleviated.
On the contrary
, these types of
organisations
 should come forward to any countries
similarly
.
Firstly
, we all are human beings and creatures of God, so we all have equal rights to receive cooperation, and without it, many nations can not enjoy their life properly.
For instance
, when
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 virus remerged in Liberia, all
country
's
organisations
 gave financial and medical support to combat
this
 fatal disease;
otherwise
, it would have been tough to contain it for Liberia, and now they are considered
as
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an Ebola
virus free
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country
 and leading a comfortable life.
Secondly
, developed
country's
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countries'
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NGO s
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NGOs
 have huge resources which are logical to utilise
it
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beyond their territories
that
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 will not only improve the condition of impoverished countries but
also
 create a cordial diplomatic relation between them.
To conclude
, people have different notions about international assistance through charity, but
the
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charities
 should prioritise problems over the location
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coherence cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Charitable organization
  • Local issues
  • National solidarity
  • Efficient use of resources
  • Global responsibility
  • Humanitarian assistance
  • International cooperation
  • Poverty
  • Natural disasters
  • Health crises
  • Domestic charity
  • International aid
  • Philanthropy
  • Altruism
  • Social welfare
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