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The use of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages

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Today, there are many social media. The example of social media are Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, and Whatsapp. Social media is a great technology product which can be used to communicate with a person at different place. Every social media
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have
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feature
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. One of
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feature
the time yet to come
future
 of social media is
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video call
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a video call
. We can
use
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video
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 call to communicate with person who stay far away from us.
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Video call
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The video call
Video calls
 can solve
problem
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problems
the problem
a problem
 about distance. If we can solve the distance problem, we will reduce cost of transportation. It is a
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big
 advantage of
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use
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using
 social media of
comunication
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
.
Video
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 call which as
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feature
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a feature
features
 of social media
is not only give
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is not only given
is not only giving
has not only given
 us
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an advantage
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also gives
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disadvantage
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. The
disadvantage
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 of
video
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 call is many people are busy on their phone without respect the people around them. The focus of social media user only on their phone so there is no interaction between people around them. Social media user can
use
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 reminder application on their phone to remember their time of
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use
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using
 social media so they may take break to interact with people around the user. In 2019 there is a pandemic, which called covid19.
This
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 pandemic makes many countries lock their transportation. Social media, which have
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feature
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featured
video
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 call is very important. No one can move to another country to communicate face to face so there are many people
use
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video
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 call to contact their families, friends, and client. If we see the advantage and
disadvantage
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 of social media, we can conclude social media give us bigger
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advantage advantage
 than
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