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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages.

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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Nowadays, most people don't have much time to cook the
food
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 at home for self and families that ultimately divert them to rely on ready made
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that is
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 available in ample quantity and even at the doorsteps with great economy.
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, it has a greater damaging effect on an individual's health.
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 with, ready to eat meals has made the kitchen life quite simple for the families with more exhausting schedules as compared to what we used to have a few decades ago.
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, for a working couple its a kind of blessing to have no worries for the cooking because these ready-made meals can save their time and effort and they can manage their appetite as well.
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, these processed foods have their dark side as well.
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, if we talk about the chemicals that are used in
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 preservation, turns out to be the active triggering elements behind several life threatening diseases
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 as diabetes, hypertension and cardiac diseases that are triggered by unhealthy way of life and excessive consumption of these types of foods. To put it in a nut shell, techniques that are used in
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 preservation for a long lasting time period often include chemicals that are immensely harmful to our bodies, its greatly weaken the immune system and make it more prone towards the infections caused by bacteria and viruses.
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