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Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child’s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Parents play an important role in the development of a
child
's
personality
. It is said by some individuals that there are other sources like television and
friends which
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friends, which
 impact the
personality
 of children. In my perspective, parents, friends and television all are essential in the life of
child
Suggestion
a child
the child
children
 and my viewpoints on these issues will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs. On the one hand, Parents work really hard to shape the
personality
 of their
child
 and they work in order to fulfil their basic needs like food
,
Accept space
,
 shelter and clothes. Apart from
this
, children acquire some of the qualities from their parents and
they
of them or themselves
their
 polish these qualities and try to make them civilized, cultured and polished.
For instance
, a survey was conducted in the Punjab in 2017 and its result was that seventy percent parents make regular efforts for the betterment of their children.
On the other hand
, some people believe that when children make friends
then
 they can share their personal feelings and thoughts with
them which
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them, which
can not
can not
cannot
 be shared with their parents and they can express their
emotion
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emotions
 freely
.
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.
For example
, when students study in colleges and
school
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school, then
then
 they can play with each other which helps them to grow well.
Besides
this
, on television children can watch cartoons, movies which motivates them to grow well. To recapitulate,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to write that all these things have their own value in shaping the
personality
 of a
child
.
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