People should follow customs and traditions when they start live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People hold different opinions about
adaption
the act of accepting with approval; favorable reception
adoption
adapting
adopting
with customs and traditions in a new country. Some argue that following
tradition’s practice
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the tradition’s practice
is necessary to start live in another one. Other,
however disagree
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however, disagree
with
this
opinion. Each of views has its own merit. Both of
views
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the views
will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
as follows. In the
first
place, there is no denying that a number of convincing explanations for the former opinion can be seen. To be more precise,
Vietnamese
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the Vietnamese
do not taboo eating habit, but eating pork is prohibited in India; should settlers adapt to
praxis
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Praxis
, they will not to be isolated and they can avoid being misunderstood about morals.
On the other hand
, I am not really sure that forcing people to adapt it is true as changing habits are
difficulty
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difficult
with immigrants. To make
this
view much clearer, one good example
for
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of
this
might be mentioned follow. Indigenous people feel normal when somebody owns guns or trade heavy weapons in The UK,
in contrast
, other countries ban these activities so which is disadvantageous
with
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to
some people like American as they use guns in order
to protect themselves especially
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to protect themselves, especially
in a new region, even they maybe break the law in these countries. Their purpose is
legitimate why
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legitimate, why
it is banned? In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I
belief
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believe
that both of
sides
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the sides
are suitable in
this
situation. By the ways, they should prepare carefully to avoid sock cultural in a new lifestyle.
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