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Some people think that teenagers should follow what the old people say whereas some believe that it is good for teenage people to challenge what old people say. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion

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There is no doubt that adolescence is a crucial period of life. While some think that teenagers should follow elder's advice while, I would argue that it is normal for them to oppose older people. On one hand, there is an absolute fact that elderly people have more experience
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 the youngsters and experience is a cruel teacher.
Therefore
, the younger generation can learn from the lessons of their old-timer.
For instance
, If parents have the habit of getting up early for a morning walk, they might want to inculcate it into their children too. And even if they don'
t
 follow their parents, that might disturb harmony of the house.
On the other hand
,
this
 difference in opinion between adults and adolescent makes the child to think critically and enhance his/her logical skills to analyse any situation
,
Accept space
,
furthermore
, giving a space where conflicts can be discussed in a positive environment built up the maturity in juvenile mind.
For example
, if minor wants to pursue his career in fashion designing and parents wants him to be an engineer, if the child remains silent, he would end up with nothing as he won'
t
 be able to develop his interest in engineering field and won'
t
 be able to chase his passion. To sum up, I opine that it is important to learn lessons from seniors, but it doesn'
t
 mean that follow them blindly. Because every person born with distinctive characteristics and abilities to learn things differently. The individual must grasp to rely on their powers
instead
 of going after myths.
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