You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: describe the vacation spot you have chosen explain how you plan to spend your time there invite your friend to join you on your vacation.
Dear Agus,
I'm writing
this
letter to invite you to join my family vacation
to Change preposition
on vacation
Iceland
. I was over the moon to hear about the winter holiday for our school, it is longer than the usual holiday.
This
holiday I'll spend my time with my family by visiting a place where we can see aurora, it is located in Iceland
, this
place is so popular among people who have visited Iceland
,
because it is Remove the comma
apply
an
amazing scenery.
Our Remove the article
apply
planning
Fix the agreement mistake
plans
are
Change the verb form
is
we
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
doing
ice skating, Verb problem
go
seeing
Wrong verb form
see
Add an article
the aurora
aurora
, Capitalize word
Aurora
drinking
hot coffee and Wrong verb form
drink
trying
local foods. We will do Wrong verb form
try
the
mountain hiking until we reach the alp of the mount and Correct article usage
apply
then
we will see the scenery for a while
from the top of it and we will ice skating
to the valley of the mountain. The coffee and local Wrong verb form
skate
culinaries
in Correct your spelling
culinary
Iceland
are so famous. But the main event are
we will see Change the verb form
is
aurora
at night.
I would be grateful if you could join my family vacation Add an article
the aurora
this
time.
Best Wishes
SumitroSubmitted by sumitros97 on
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coherence cohesion
Some sentences need better structure and clarity. For example, 'This holiday I'll spend...' could be rephrased to sound more fluent.
task achievement
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'mountain hiking until we reach the alp of the mount.' Instead, you could say 'hiking up the mountain until we reach the peak.'
task achievement
You've managed to give a detailed description of your vacation plans, which enhances the reader's understanding.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a friendly tone and is written in a way that is inviting and warm.
logical structure
The structure is logical with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.