You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: describe the vacation spot you have chosen explain how you plan to spend your time there invite your friend to join you on your vacation.

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Dear Agus, I'm writing
this
letter to invite you to join my family
vacation
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to
Iceland
. I was over the moon to hear about the winter holiday for our school, it is longer than the usual holiday.
This
holiday I'll spend my time with my family by visiting a place where we can see aurora, it is located in
Iceland
,
this
place is so popular among people who have visited
Iceland
,
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because it is
an
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amazing scenery. Our
planning
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plans
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are
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is
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we
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will
doing
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ice skating,
seeing
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see
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the aurora
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aurora
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Aurora
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,
drinking
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hot coffee and
trying
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try
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local foods. We will do
the
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mountain hiking until we reach the alp of the mount and
then
we will see the scenery for a
while
from the top of it and we will ice
skating
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skate
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to the valley of the mountain. The coffee and local
culinaries
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culinary
in
Iceland
are so famous. But the main event
are
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is
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we will see
aurora
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the aurora
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at night. I would be grateful if you could join my family vacation
this
time. Best Wishes Sumitro
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coherence cohesion
Some sentences need better structure and clarity. For example, 'This holiday I'll spend...' could be rephrased to sound more fluent.
task achievement
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'mountain hiking until we reach the alp of the mount.' Instead, you could say 'hiking up the mountain until we reach the peak.'
task achievement
You've managed to give a detailed description of your vacation plans, which enhances the reader's understanding.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a friendly tone and is written in a way that is inviting and warm.
logical structure
The structure is logical with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking scenery
  • cultural landmarks
  • itinerary
  • accommodations
  • excursions
  • gastronomic delights
  • leisure activities
  • unwind and relax
  • off the beaten track
  • once-in-a-lifetime experience
  • picturesque
  • explore
  • local cuisine
  • adventure
  • bonding
  • create memories
  • companionship
  • escapade
  • serenity
  • revitalize
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