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some people think that that is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others , however , believe that boys and girls benefits more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It would be argued by some that it is more beneficial to send students to single-sex schools. In my opinion,
however
, they should enter a mixed-gender education. On the one hand, there are several reasons why some think that students should study in single-gender schools. The
first
 reason is when boys and girls are taught separately; there is little chance for early relationships. Without worrying about these distractions, students might be able to concentrate more on their studies, and
therefore
, might get higher academic results than those at co-ed schools. Another reason boys and girls have different learning needs.
Therefore
, it is better for them to be taught separately as single-sex schools offer teaching styles, subject choices, and learning programs that are entirely focused on either boys or girls.
On the other hand
, I would argue that it would be better for students to enter mixed-gender education.
Firstly
, students studying in co-ed schools have the opportunity to interact and take part in group work activities with opposite-sex classmates.
This
 may help them learn a wide range of skills,
such
 as communication or teamwork necessary for their latest jobs.
Secondly
, co-ed schools teach them about co-existence and gender equality.
This
 is because male and female students are given a chance to explore each other's
perspectives
Suggestion
perspective
, their similarities, and differences. In conclusion,
although
 some people think that students should be sent to single-sex schools, I personally believe that mixed-gender education brings more benefits to students.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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