Some people think high end technology can prevent and cut down the rate of committing crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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contemporary era

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the contemporary era

, Technology

flourishing

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is flourishing

flourishes

laps

a light, self-propelled movement upwards or forwards

leaps

and bounds. People are becoming a workaholic and self-

centered

being or placed in the center

centred

. There are a few members of the community think that, a high standard

automation

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can reduce and remove the frequency of

masses

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the masses

, those who committing offence. I totally disagree with

this

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notion,

however

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, advancement in a

machinary

machines or machine systems collectively

machinery

will make even more theft, as

offender

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use

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uses

a technology wisely to

makes

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make

crime

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To begin

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with,

nowdays

the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech

nowadays

, human

is give

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has given

is given

gives

much more concern to the

advancemet

encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something

advancement

advance met

in computerisation.

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, a major

offender

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is now aware of techniques and

use

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this

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formula to

committing

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commit

robery

larceny by threat of violence

robbery

. As, using effective

techniques there

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techniques, there

is very rare chances that they get caught.

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, Toady a many organisations

use

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a CCTV cameras, to prevent being theft in their shop,

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, criminals are much aware of

this

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and they

haev

have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense

have

develpoe

being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful

developed

a software to crack a CCTV.

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is how person today

use

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application to

makes

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make

robery

United States parliamentary authority and author (in 1876) of Robert's Rules of Order (1837-1923)

Robert

rivalry

rubber

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, through using

effecient

being effective without wasting time or effort or expense

efficient

automation

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criminals nowadays hack a lot of websites and hack the significant data and

than

subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)

then

sell it to

somwhere

in or at or to some place

somewhere

else for getting money.

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new way

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a new way

the new way

to getting

crime

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with

help

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the help

of technology.

On the other hand

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, there are several reasons, that machine assist

hunam

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humanity

human

to prevent a

crime

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, todays, GPS can be

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use

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used

in order to find location of phone.

This

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would be help

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would help

to police to find

offender

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who robe the phone.

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, invention of different sorts of software is

help

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helping

in order to maintain

record

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records

theft

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the theft

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were be

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was

very difficult in past when

such

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advancement were not

avialable

obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service

available

. To conclude

this

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, advancement is useful in many ways to catch

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offender

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and track them easily,

However

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, there is a plethora of way in which

automation

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assist to a human to make a

robery

larceny by threat of violence

robbery

rubbery

Robert

. So it does not rational to me to say that

automation

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can reduce a rate of

crime

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