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The solution of overcrowded traffic. What are the problems? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowaday
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Nowadays
, these are about of cars on British road and they have increased day to day. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. In
this
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 essay, I intend to examine, about the solutions of these problems.
Firstly
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, the people living in British need to think about themselves. If they used the bus and train
instead
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 of their
car
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,
this
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 problem would resolve a little. Because of
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, the British Government should introduce to control
car
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 ownership and use.
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, the government can ban to enter the road by
car
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 in the someday all family from a house.
Secondly
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, the buses and trains of government should be free for public population.
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, the people would use these transport vehicles
instead
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 of their own
car
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. After that, the roads in Britain would be safer and more comfortable.
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, the number of cars that are exported from another country should decrease and the prices of
car
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 should increase in case they aren’t overcrowded.
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, the prices of cigarettes increased and the
consuption
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
 of cigarettes
get
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gets
 down. In conclusion, if these measures put into action the problem of traffic can be decreased in the British roads.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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