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Some people believe that women should play equal role in military force.while others think women are suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views give your opinion

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In
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 contemporary era, the concept of gender disparity has been
vanished
expel from a community or group
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. Some people opine role of women and men should be equalized in the field of
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, other's are indifferent to
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 notion.I, personally, opine with the former view.  To commence with, women are given considerations of being more skilled in the context of integrity and strategies, holding
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 view each and every task performed by them in
defence
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 field would be proved productive in terms of safety level of a nation.
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, females already co-existing in
defence
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 would provide platform to others, who ideally want to set their career in similar line.
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, it was anticipated that 50 percent of women opted their profession in arm force after being motivated from meritorious
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 officers. Despite of
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, others react very oddly to
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 tendency.Their perception is that with the onus of
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 trend, degree of constraints would be dropped down on already imprisoned offenders. As females are enlisted sensitivities, in order to take actions for exploration of conspiracies from the criminal's mind.Resultantly, promotion of crime will come under action.  To conclude,
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 some people claim that females should be disregarded for
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 job due to sensitivity in their behaviour, I disagree with
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them,because women are the best considered character in
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 field due to certain traits
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