In many modern societies , grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandchildren. What do you think are the consequences of this ?

Nowadays, gerunds are suffering from a complete isolation. There are a huge gap between the children and parents
grands. There are a lot of consequences for
, we are going to share some of it today might can change something.
, Our world become so quick comparing of
century, there are a lot of reasons for it some of it, our lifestyle life becomes so tough and harder than before,
technology effect of us
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
on our new generation which is grandchildren
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99% of our children become more addicted of cell phone they are become comparing of
On the other hand
, our grandchildren most of the time feels lonely and sometime they don't know their grandchildren, the cause of that vacuum to appearance. Appearances have a big responsibility to reduce the gap between them shields and the grandfather or mothers.
Also its
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Also, its
unfair for the grandfather doesn't see their grandchildren, special they old already and they need some happiness which is coming from their kids
, we have to change our lifestyle, we have to be more attached with our grands, we can
back like before reducing our technology and feel some joins with our relative, In conclusion, Our grands are a big gift from our god we have to take care of them
like what they did with us before, especially as we know we will get old soon and for sure we will not be happy if
happened with us. So we have to treat them like a gift.
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