Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, it is irrefutable that
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,
softh
yielding readily to pressure or weight
soft
drinks and others that called ‘junk foods’ are
extremelly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
harmful to our
bodie
the entire structure of an organism (an animal, plant, or human being)
bodies
body
. Some people believe that the governments must be responsible to make sure that the population have healthier meals while others said that it is the
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of each
individuals
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individual
. In
this
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essay, I will explain and give reasons that why I believe each individual and the governments have their own
responsibility
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about the topic health and
diet
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. Each
person
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knows
whats
what thing
what
what's
is suitable for their bodies, that means every individual have their specific
diet
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and
also
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genetic factors must be considerable.
For example
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, overweight does not mean anymore that the
person
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is sick or has a high cholesterol,
this
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person
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might
has
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have
a wonderful health and because of the family
body
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structure looks ‘fat’. Actually, the most people do not require a specific
diet
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, because they usually eat the necessary nutrients. The result is people more satisfied with their
body
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and with
control
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of what they are eating. Another point of view is if the
person
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are not feeling
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is not feeling
pleased about the
body
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or if the
person
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are feeling sick, it means that, the individuals have not certain if their
body
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is working well, it is their
responsibility
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looking for a specialist to find a solution. At the present time it has a wage range of health and
diet
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specialist
such
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as nutricionist and endocrinologist and these professionals are able to recommend the right
diet
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or might hormone if is necessary to the patient, as a results, each
person
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will be guide to eat the correct amount of vitamins, vegetables and carbohydrates exactly what the
body
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needs.
On the other hand
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, the government is responsible for the healthy eating of their residents as well.
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, the authorities must
control
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and develop effective rules about how the industries are
advertaising
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
their products. The reason is because it is common that food industries hide some unhealthy ingredients changing its name on the label.
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, it has a variety of
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sugars
such
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as raw
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, dextran, fructose and many more other names,
although
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, writing at the product packs are zero
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.
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, because of it the individual could consume something harmful and do not even know. Another key point is the
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of disease, as an example is diabetes, obesity and high cholesterol, especially in children, as a consequence is a poor
heathly
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
community and
high
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higher
spending for the treatment of theses illnesses. In
cloncusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, it is
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responsibility
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the responsibility
of the individual understand what type of food is suitable for
theirself
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and if it was not easy they must
looking
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look
for a professional that will help them. And
also
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, the
governanments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
government
have to
control
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the industry advertisement
to
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for
it does not hide some prejudicial ingredient and the
governaments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
also
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must keep their nation
heathly
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
. For theses reasons I affirm that both are responsible for a
heathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
eating.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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