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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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I tend to confess that the richest and
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 authorities, controls the media and
also
 insists the their opinions and controls attitudes of the people. To convince and to divert the hot issues in the society, people will raise some fake issues and will do the propaganda on those issues. The following essay will outline, what could be done to rectify
this
 issue. Perhaps, the main reason the most influential people are controlling the media in all over the world. They will decide what kind of news to publish and what kind of discussion need to be done with
this
 argument. Even
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 authorities and legislatives
also
 supporting these people. Media is the powerful channel to speak truth, everyone follows and trust the information coming from the channels.
This
 is the main reason, everyone interested in doing propaganda through the media and people will insist their ideas on the people to get the positive image. On the other side, media is the easiest channel to reach many people and to get the positive image in the society. Even legislatives members,
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 authorities doing publicity about the government policies and business magnets doing advertisements about their products through the media. On the flip side, media are the burning point in all over the world. Because media not publishing the right news nowadays. The media people taking the bribes and doing favouritism to the wrong people. Media is publishing the positive news or advertisements on the items or products to increase the sales and to get the profits to companies. In my point of view, the media must not be the commercial entertainment. In every country, legislatives must pass the rules to stop, to run the media in the commercial way.
Moreover media
Accept comma addition
Moreover, media
 must be controlled by the
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 not by the private people and it is better to not allow the private channels. With
this
 at least we can stop the bribe in the media.
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