New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

In
this
era of technology, new gadgets are released nearly every month, particularly online
gamin
the act of playing for stakes in the hope of winning (including the payment of a price for a chance to win a prize)
gaming
, where children play with each other on the internet.
This
has been a great achievement for
human-kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humankind
,
however
, I believe the advantages do not outweigh the disadvantages, as there are many worries in respect to the side effects of these devices.
Firstly
, children nowadays spend most of their free time on smart devices, from studying to playing, all is done
on
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with
electronics.
For example
, on average a child spends 5 hours daily on gaming consoles
such
as
Playstation
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the Playstation
. A study done by Australian University of Medical Sciences in 2019, reported that children with increase screen-time are more
likley
has a good chance of being the case or of coming about
likely
to have an early deterioration of eyesight.
Eventhough
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Even though
, technology has made many things feasible, it has
also
raised concerns regarding the addictive
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
, it has on a young mind.
On the other hand
, due to the rising spread of diseases
such
as Covid-19, parents prefer their child to play inside
instead
of being outside. For
this
reason, guardians are letting children play on online games,
however
, they should be worried about
detrimental effects
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the detrimental effects
its having on a child's brain.
Moreover
, psychologists have reported, that children in the future
tend
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will tend
to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
ability
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the ability
to
socilaise
take part in social activities; interact with others
socialise
socialize
in-person, and stay away from social gatherings. To conclude, though technology has made life easy and entertaining for kids, it has
also
introduced many negative effects, it is having on younger children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Inappropriate content
  • Self-learning
  • Screen time
  • Social inequality
  • Enhanced communication
  • Creative expression
  • Educational resources
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