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Some studies suggest criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, the best way to reduce crime levels is to educate people in prisons so that they can get a job after they are released from prisons. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is said that criminals have a low level of
education
 and educate them is one of the best ways to reduce crime levels.
This
 can help them to find a job when they are free and get back to the social. From my perspective, I deem myself to agree with
this
 statement because it
is not only provided
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has not only provided
is not only providing
 them a piece of knowledge but
also
 the essential skills. On the one hand, offering the
education
 program for offenders can bring various effects.
This
 is because
education
 can bring
for
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to
 them the social knowledge to catch up with society.
Besides
, it can provide some essential skills in a basic career for the prisoner, which can help them to find a suitable job and create an income source for their living.
For instance
, according to VanHien university's survey that more than 50% of offenders find a suitable job after they take
education
 in jail.
On the other hand
, the prisoner will have plenty of
time so
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time, so
 they can talk with others or log in to the objectionable contents which will bring the negative effects, so educate them is the best way to reduce their time for bad habits. In conclusion, there is a lot of benefit in educating the offenders because it does not only give them a chance to remark their life but
also
 reduce the crime rate in the society.
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