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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#activity #child #skills #creativity
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An ongoing debate has been in the market
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 a long time, that pivots around whether creative activities help develop better skills in a child. Some believe that extra-curricular activities develop better competency.
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human brain occurs in early years”,
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 will open a doorway to try new things. None the less, activities like painting, pottery, music and many more, will not only help in developing more ideas but connecting with students of similar
mind sets
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, thereby enabling the kids for building networks independently. A survey conducted by The New York University in
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early 2000s states that the children, who were unveiled to creative hobbies, develop
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 process, and those kids were finer at adapting changes as compared to the ones, who were more into
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 activities from the very beginning, turned out to be shy, introverts. I completely support the idea of promoting non-conventional ways of learning, as it will eventually help in
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child’s brain. To conclude, People should consider their children’s choice before making up any decision and promote their kids liking rather than their own to help infants grow intellectually.
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