Small businesses should avoid recruiting young women who do not have their own family in order to avoid paying maternity leave later on. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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which recruiting young women must pay
maternity
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leave.
Maternity
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leave will happen in every young women
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career
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agree
if small
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bussinesses
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businesses
should avoid recruiting young woman so
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these
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business
should not pay
maternity
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leave. Paying
maternity
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leave will make small
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business
lost money which can be used as asset and
profit
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.
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, small
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business
which pay
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leave will
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much money as
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an
asset. If the finance is used as
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business
expander, the small
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business
will increase and it can reach as medium
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businesses
. The
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business
which uses funds as asset efficiently will make their
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businesses
greater than before.
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, small
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businesses
business
owner should think
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carefully
to decide about funds using.
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, the owner of
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a
small
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business
will
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lose
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some
profit
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if they pay
maternity
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leave. The
profit
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of
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businesses
will not full if the owner must pay
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. The time of
break even
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break-even
point will increase if the
profit
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is not full.
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, it is better to recruit boys as employers which will not take
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leave. To
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summarise
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, small
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bussines
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business
should recruit young men if they will get full
profit
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and have much money to make bigger their
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business
without thinking about pay
maternity
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leave. So, it is clear that idea of recruiting young men is better than young women.
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