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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment? house

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In the era of globalisation, construction is soaring at an alarming rate, due to
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, there are massive multi-storey building has been built.
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, a few masses prefer to stay in the villa are privet bungalow, while others have an opinion that, living a multi-story
apartment
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 would be a better option. In my opinion, there are a plethora of pros to accommodate in a personal villa rather than staying in
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apartment
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. As it provides large parking facilities and garden which would not possible in case of
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apartment
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.
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 with, As competition has become
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more stiff than before, people have
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migrated
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 to the suburb area, where they have to stay in
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apartment
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, due to lack of space in
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own area.
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 would
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 them to access the all basic amenities at walking distance, as they live in the city centre or few
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 away from
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uburb.
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, people who live in town, do not have to far travel in order to take basic thing
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 as grocery and clothes, compared to those who live in
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ountryside. Apart from
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, In a building
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there are a lot of families live in a
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single
apartment
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,
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, it is easy to socialise with people and meeting
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people
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ifferent culture. which, make them
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 to adjust with different communities
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, those who do not like hustle and bustle are stay in their person
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bungalow
. The most important benefit to living in
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 own house is they get
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uge parking area, so, they do not
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facing
face
 problem regarding
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.
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, Those who have more than one vehicle in their family would not face any threat to
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theft
that
 as parking are proper.
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, they do not have to take a plethora of
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, as,
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those
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 who live in
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op floor of the
apartment
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 To conclude
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, there are several pros and of the
iving
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living
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such
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 as basic amenities and meeting a new culture.
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, I agree there are more benefits of staying in their own house, there is a huge parking space and availability of garden make immense joy to stay at home.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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