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Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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It is
education
 which makes a person civilized, cultured and polished.
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t is said by some individuals that primary,
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econdary and
university
education
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of background.
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n my perspective,
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eople should pay for
university
education
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ut
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ower
level
 of
education
 must be free for all the communities.
To begin
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t is possible for all the nations to provide
education
 without charging any fee at
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rimary,
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iddle and secondary
level
 because at
this
level
 it is less costly as compared to
university
education
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or instance, a survey was conducted by all the experts and people's reviews were gathered,
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nd it had concluded that fifty per cent
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people were in favour of free
education
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chool
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.
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oreover,
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t is not possible for all the nations to manage
education
 free at
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niversity
level
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igher
level
 cost of the training,
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orkshop,
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eminars and laboratories increases which can be only collected through tuition fee.
On the other hand
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t should be approachable for the people of tribal or rural background.
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he government should open school and colleges in
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ural area
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o that people can get access to literacy.
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oreover,
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overnment should introduce
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cholarship scheme in which it should financially support the students who belong to poor families and those who secured highest marks in the examination. To recapitulate, I would like to write that
education
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ower
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ut students from rural background should be appreciated.
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