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Some people argue that if children behave badly their parent should accept responsibility and also be punished for the behavior of their children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Parents children relationship is a kind of
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art and it has been changed enormously, compared to
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ast couple of
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. There are various qualities that are distinguished as
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 for parents,
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 as strict behaviour and punishments for mistakes, they have done. Today, a friendly nature aroused among parents, but still
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some people argue, it is cumbersome to
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 up a child with
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riendly approach, rather he should be punished for any bad activities. We can
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both the side,
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 and foremost, children joined the school could face
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eacher's approach, some of them polite and few are hard and strict. Children are always scared of the strict tutor and complete their assignments and homework given by them, but they might be careless to the teacher, who are soft in nature.
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, it is mandatory to be discipline while growing up,
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 it could create a bright future. As an example, students who are participating as a volunteer in National Services in India
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should follow utmost discipline. If they miss the hat, they should make a round around the ground
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10 times. At
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, punishment is not a proper solution to keep them disciplined, it should be handled in a very proper manner.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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