Some people think that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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having daily assignments can improve the chances of getting good grades,

children

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can

also

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feel overwhelmed with

homework

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overload. I believe that they have been asked to do more than they should when it comes to

homework

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. First of all,

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children

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development is not limited to academic activities. They should have plenty of

time

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to play with friends and stay connected with their families.

Parents

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must emphasize the importance of

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management for the young ones. There is

time

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to sleep, to have meals, to

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shower, to watch TV, to practice sports, and to study. No primary activity should take the

time

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of others, often considered secondary.

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, have fun.

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parents

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are having

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less

time

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to stay with their sons

due to

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the long shifts at work and the

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spent in the traffic. In

this

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way, kids start to choose

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their own how much

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they will spend between

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and

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, if they are not kept busy with assignments, they will probably spend all their

time

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with TV shows, YouTube and

video-games

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, as

parents

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are not able to watch closely their

homework

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, teachers are

getting

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taking

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more responsibility

over

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for

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children

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education, and daily

homework

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is a good way to keep

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then

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them

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focused. I strongly believe that

parents

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must be aware of all aspects of their

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children

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education.

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includes,

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, being present at school meetings, getting to know how often and what kind of

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the students need to do and

support

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them with these activities.

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Your essay presents a clear opinion, which is crucial for responding to the prompt.

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You have made a commendable effort to address both sides of the argument.

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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