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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are loosing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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In many countries, gorgeous natural areas have been destroyed by cities expansion and population
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. The government and the legislators should be concerned about protecting their green spots because they are part of the country identity.
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 of all, nature should not be treated as an endless resource.
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, many investors and companies put profit above all other things. Business like
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 must be punished severely with fines, licenses withdraw, and work impeachments.
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 natural green areas will be totally destroyed.
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, the pollution will increase to
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armful level for human health and global warming is going to keep increasing year after year.
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, the beauty of nature is an asset for any country, once it can be explored as places to be visited by tourists and generate revenue. North Americans,
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S in order to visit the Grand Canyon. While Canada has
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normous variety of natural parks from British Columbia to Nova Scotia, many of them with paid entrance. One possible manner to reduce the damage that urban development causes on natural areas
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 establishing severe rules for constructors to explore new lands. Another measure to be taken is to demand CO2 compensations whenever a new land explored by a company.
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, make use of renewable materials and
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 eco-friendly transportation,
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nature is not an easy task, but should certainly be a goal to be hit by any nation.
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