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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes(for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children ) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people suggest that free
community
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 service should be incorporated into high
school
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 programmes and it is a great opportunity for pupils to build a good relationship with the local
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. I partly agree with
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 idea and I will explain it in
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 essay. On the one hand, doing voluntary jobs
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 as teaching sports to younger children can have a positive impact on adolescents' personality development and can create a more friendly environment for neighbours.
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, learning how to help others without asking payback enables teenagers to become a well-rounded person.
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, a recent study conducted in the US has shown the students who are willing to involve in
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 service are generally more open-minded and have high social intelligence.
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, those qualities are the main reasons why they tend to be more successful in the work environment since they are great team players.
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, there are drawbacks in doing too much
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 works.
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 is because high
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 students usually have to spend 8 to 12 hours in
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 and they might not have enough time to deal with extra work. Take Chinese high
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 students as an example, they have to study about seven different subjects on average and do homework after
school
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, which can cause them approximately over 13 hours per day. In
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 case, compulsory services would pose too much pressure on students since it is basically impossible to balance
school
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 life and other physical work. In conclusion,
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 service can be beneficial to students' personal growth.
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, sometimes it would probably be stressful for them. Personally, I believe that contributing to the neighbourhood would be an excellent choice as long as we put a limit on time and make sure it won't affect pupils
school
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 grades.
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