Write a letter to a financial organization that gives money to students who would like to take part-time course. Mention - Qualification and work experience -Details abut the course -How this course will help you

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Dear sir, Hope

this

letter finds you in radiant health. My name is Rushi and I'm

insterated

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interested

in your organization's

sponsership

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sponsorship

program.I have a degree

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science

applicationand

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application and

Currently I'm working as a

techer

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teacher

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Mount

carmel

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school. Let me explain my situation. I'm planning to apply

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for

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one

part time

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part-time

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history course. But

fees

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the fees

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for

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this

course is very high and I don't have much amount of money for it. Actually one of my

friend

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told me about your organization and his name is Mr

devang

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diving

. Would you kindly accept my application

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Because

this

course is very important for my future growth. After finishing it, I will be able to open my own classes and I can

also

apply

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any university as a

hostory

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history

faculty. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, RUSHI

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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

135 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Write a letter to a financial organization that gives money to students who would like to take part-time course. Mention - Qualification and work experience -Details abut the course -How this course will help you

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Grandparents take care of children when their parents are out at work. What are the advantages and possible disadvantages of this?

Write a letter to a city planning manager about demolition of a historical building in your area and say – Explain why it shouldn’t be demolished. – Suggest a future use for this building. – Recommend a way to raise money for repairs.

In many countries, schoolchildren are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think should this be enforced in all schools?

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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, ltaly and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.