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Write a letter to a financial organization that gives money to students who would like to take part-time course. Mention - Qualification and work experience -Details abut the course -How this course will help you

#organization #money #students #course #qualification #work #-details #abut #-how
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Dear sir, Hope
this
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 letter finds you in radiant health. My name is Rushi and I'm
insterated
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interested
 in your organization's
sponsership
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sponsorship
 program.I have a degree
of
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 science
applicationand
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application and
 Currently I'm working as a
techer
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teacher
in
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 Mount
carmel
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 school. Let me explain my situation. I'm planning to apply
in
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for
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 one
part time
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part-time
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 history course. But
fees
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the fees
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of
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this
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 course is very high and I don't have much amount of money for it. Actually one of my
friend
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 told me about your organization and his name is Mr
devang
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diving
. Would you kindly accept my application
.
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 Because
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 course is very important for my future growth. After finishing it, I will be able to open my own classes and I can
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 apply
in
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 any university as a
hostory
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history
 faculty. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, RUSHI
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic background
  • relevant work experience
  • commitment
  • field of study
  • part-time course
  • institution
  • duration
  • career goals
  • acquire new skills
  • enhance knowledge
  • financial assistance
  • pursue
  • summarizing
  • reiterating
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