With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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In our modern-day society, the heated debate over how to keep the family tie

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has become a common sight when there is a growing increase in the fractions of divorce and family breakdowns from all corners of the world. There are,

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put forth some proper solutions to overcome, followed by a reasonable conclusion. In the

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place, it is, admittedly, contended that the development of

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family life. What I mean by

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family members spend communicating with one another in the

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way. They tend to participate in the social network, namely Facebook,

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, Instagram… in leisure

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rather than get together to have a word with every member of

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amily. As an inexorable consequence of the invasive trend to become a technophile, they do not spend sufficient

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fostering their family, beloved ones

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as the children or partner.

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contributes to the vast majority of bitter conflicts between family members, making the invisible distance in the family gradually lengthened, and

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leading to the results as divorces or the breakdowns of family. In order to sort out the problem, it is, undoubtedly, believed that people should address the root cause -

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eyes glued on the screens of

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devices, namely computers,

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or video games is the subject to certain restrictions.

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to say, family members had better spend free

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either taking part in outdoor activities together or having a just 10-minute talk with everyone in families per day to make the family relationship closer. As an apparent result, the gap between family members

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, triggering the fact that the risk of family breakdowns is likely wiped out. By the way of conclusion, being addicted to

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has become a serious problem due to its harm on the family relationship and the solution is to put the

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under the control. I am of the opinion that the negative sides of

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