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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #skills
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is said by some individuals that proper
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hile others believe that
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work experience
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nd some other skills are essential in
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n my perspective,
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f a person wants to get
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ighly paid job,
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hen he must have
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ducation and all the soft skills,
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o both are essential. On the one hand,
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t is seen everywhere that top-rated companies select newly graduate and postgraduate students from colleges and universities because they think that educated students have sufficient knowledge about the particular field which is really essential in
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or instance, a survey was conducted in India and its result was that seventy per cent top companies hire students from colleges and universities.
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oreover,
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hen an individual completes the
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hen he/she works under the guidance and training of the teachers which make them skilled.
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ffective communication,
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lexibility,
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daptability are important in
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tackle the difficult situations at work.
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ll the higher positions of the organisations give preferences to
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skilled and experienced employees because they think that experienced people are more intelligent and persistent. To recapitulate,
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hen he must
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be experienced and must update his/her
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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