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In many countries online shopping is becoming more and more popular. Some people think that this is having negative impacts on the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree and give your opinion.

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Doing online shopping has become a trend these days and it is quite famous in many nations. Many individuals hold the opinion that it affects
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society in a bad manner.
However
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 to a large extent. To commence with, there are certain reasons for my disagreement. Primarily, shopping through
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nternet has made lives much easier of people who are workaholic or live in rural areas. To explain, as
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orking class do not have much
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 to go to the cities due to their hectic schedule, they purchase commodities through
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nternet and the rural people get
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better access to a large number of branded clothing by sitting at home.
Moreover
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waste their
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Therefore
, online shopping saves precious
time
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another benefit of online shopping is the availability of
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yriad of accessories which are not even present in the local stores. An individual can order any foreign product which is not present in his or her city.
Additionally
, many discounts are offered by online shopping companies by which a person saves his money. Apart from
this
, the cost of online products are much lesser than market prices and a customer has
also
 an option of returning the goods. There are many online companies
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flipkart
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 and myntra which are popular worldwide.
However
, some people claim that online shopping is not safe and worth to do as items shown on the internet are not the same as the items people receive. They argue that the quantity of goods is not much valuable .
Moreover
, numerous complaints by customers are filed against owners of companies due to delay in
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rder. To recapitulate, I believe that
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 there are some cons of online shopping, it is the best method to shop as it saves much
time
 and provides a large variety of goods.
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