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In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in in the field of information technology, for example the world wide web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. To what extend do you agree with this view?

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Firstly
, it is fast and easy to contact with family and friends even they live far. when I live in Canada, I could keep in touch with my friends and called with my family frequently through skype or facetime. The time zone is totally different between
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wo countries.
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nternet is faster than before and most of
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 wi-fi. So I did not need to send a mail or make
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 international phone call.
Secondly
, people who want to learn something can get
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ducation at home.
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ew years ago, if someone wanted to learn something, example, play
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 guitar, she/he had to go to guitar class and it
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, providing that people have a computer and Internet, they can learn everything on Youtube with
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, unless
technology
 developed, students have to go to school for classes even outbreak like COVID-19.
Lastly
, developed
technology
 will save people's life. Current
technology
 skill can make people's parts and some organs by 3D printers.
Therefore
, many people who going to die with illness could get one more opportunity
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 life in the close future. It still
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 to more study about medical information
technology
 and 3D printers. I think
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 more negative effects than positive. I believe on condition that people use information
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