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Medical professionals such as doctors or nurses from poorer countries often migrate to richer countries to work. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Healthcare sector
  • Workload
  • Cultural barriers
  • Economic implications
  • Quality of care
  • Mortality rates
  • Incentivize
  • Remuneration
  • International agreements
  • Infrastructure
  • Underserved areas
  • Exchange programs
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