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rofession is one of the crucial parts in a person’s life. It is one of the most important decisions which will decide the future of the whole family of the person. In most of the case,

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andsom amount of earnings. Before joining any higher education institute students and their parents will prefer to select

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

consideration
sole factor
financial stability
security
motivating factor
dissatisfaction
demotivation
job satisfaction
overall well-being
fulfillment
work-life balance
flexible working hours
vacations
career growth opportunities
skill development
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