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When choosing a job. The salary is the most important consideration. What extent do you agree or disagree?

#job #salary #consideration
After completion education choosing
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rofession is one of the crucial parts in a person’s life. It is one of the most important decisions which will decide the future of the whole family of the person. In most of the case,
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age is the most important consideration for professionals but in my opinion,
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 is not the case.
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esire that his ward will get
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ucrative appointment offer with
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handsome
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andsom amount of earnings. Before joining any higher education institute students and their parents will prefer to select
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ollege in which placement level his highest.
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, the college which has good records of high stipend placement
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 will be always
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irst choice of students as well
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their parents. In most of
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ase
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people get
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frustrated
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, salary is not the only thing which should
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 most important while selecting professional life because on
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ong run it will result in frustration.
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, many people will leave
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ighly paid
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 only due to lack of
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it should be not considered as
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ost prior thing at the time of selection of
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. In my opinion,
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erson should
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be give
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 importance to
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ob which will give more and more
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econdary aspect for the selection of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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