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In many countries women are allowed to take maternity leave from their jobs during the first month after the birth of their baby. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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hild is rights for woman. Being temporarily off work means the new mothers can have time to recover from their delivery. Recent research suggests that longer leaves may benefit infant and development - children whose mothers take longer leaves found to have lower mortality rates and higher test scores. Yet little is known about the effect of longer parental leave leaves on the physical and mental problems of mothers. Admittedly, leave can make it possible that the father, mum, and the newly-born share good quality family time. The infant needs to love from their parents because there are too small, expert says children who eat breast milk is healthier than that feed milk power and grow faster. women do not permit to leave not only their babies cannot be taken care of, but it leaves emotional isolation, thereby making the family less closely-knit. The disadvantage of women take their break may effect on company's productive, another problem is their work will replace for their workmate. It may take a long time for female to adapt to their work when they return to
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