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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

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Most of the deadly diseases
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 as smallpox, hepatitis, measles, tuberculosis etc. are prevented by vaccines. As different vaccines have
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 own merits and demerits, the argument on imposing the vaccines on children or letting the parents decide on immunizing their children is still debatable. I partially agree with the statement. Many people argue that vaccine is a business and we should not take it. These people
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uman body has its innate ability to develop the immune system against virus or bacteria causing any medical conditions.
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, certain group counter
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 ideology stating, every human body and its ability to fight the disease is different,
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, we cannot take a chance and immunize our children to prevent the common diseases.
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 I majorly agree that we should protect our children by vaccinating them against deadly diseases, I
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 feel that we should consider the side effects of vaccines that will affect our children in later stages.
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, Ebola vaccine when administered,
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ertain group of people had
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evere allergic reaction and it caused kidney failure in
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ew cases. Making vaccination mandatory will be like taking away the individuals right to choose.
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, vaccination can be made compulsory for any disease that has the potential to spread to fellow human beings. To conclude, I believe children should be vaccinated from common diseases.
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, it’s the decision that parents should make and imposing the law to make immunization mandatory is not advisable considering the negative effects in some cases. Though,
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overnment can take awareness sessions to parents on the advantages of vaccination.
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